What do you regard of the setting up of my story?(short one)?
well i rewrote my chapter one. what do you think? know that i am not writing a book and it is not about vampires.(again i know i own a lot of syntax and grammar mistakes cause i am greek) appreciation!
The sky was tinted with the colors of the rising sun and the wind, pleading for a touch that never could enjoy, prowled every single body.
Two sides, mortal and immortal, dark and light, an eternal battle rekindled again and afterwards faded like the moon does after the first sunbeams.
Thousands of eyes were pinned upon the two of them. Thousands of dark desires be devouring them. But those were only colorless figures contained by the background of an image.
Roxanne smiled nostalgically and looked into his eyes, the eyes for which she would die for anytime. She wanted to touch him, but two men be keeping her hands tightly, without allowing her to move. Tears rolled down her cold cheeks.
He made half a step ahead and the chains holding his hand and feet, budged heavily, making the only noise contained by this cursed terrain.
Someone shouted. Nobody noticed him.
The silver blade flashed in the first sunlight ...
Answers:
Its obedient and the details are great
I've read better. Sorry.
I actually really really resembling this.
Can I say that it doesn't really feel like a launch. I mean if you could tie it in as a beginning it'd be intensely skillful on your subdivision, but I get more of a prologue, fast-forward vibe from it. Like you'd have this, and then you'd rear back to the beginning of the story in Roxanne's person.
Cool, really great!
I love it. It's really good and the way you detailed this it is just awesome!! Good luck!
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The sky was tinted with the colors of the rising sun and the wind, pleading for a touch that never could enjoy, prowled every single body.
Two sides, mortal and immortal, dark and light, an eternal battle rekindled again and afterwards faded like the moon does after the first sunbeams.
Thousands of eyes were pinned upon the two of them. Thousands of dark desires be devouring them. But those were only colorless figures contained by the background of an image.
Roxanne smiled nostalgically and looked into his eyes, the eyes for which she would die for anytime. She wanted to touch him, but two men be keeping her hands tightly, without allowing her to move. Tears rolled down her cold cheeks.
He made half a step ahead and the chains holding his hand and feet, budged heavily, making the only noise contained by this cursed terrain.
Someone shouted. Nobody noticed him.
The silver blade flashed in the first sunlight ...
Answers:
Its obedient and the details are great
I've read better. Sorry.
I actually really really resembling this.
Can I say that it doesn't really feel like a launch. I mean if you could tie it in as a beginning it'd be intensely skillful on your subdivision, but I get more of a prologue, fast-forward vibe from it. Like you'd have this, and then you'd rear back to the beginning of the story in Roxanne's person.
Cool, really great!
I love it. It's really good and the way you detailed this it is just awesome!! Good luck!
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When does the book Runaway come out?
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