Honest opinion needed on book?
I'm writing a book in my spare time and need some honest opinions. this is my prologue and i want to know what adjectives of you think.
I remember that one day… The day the world turned inward… The day the stars fell to the ground. The top soil became scorched. People turned to ash in mere second. Civilization crumbled in mere minutes. The world died in hours. Oceans boiled for days, months. Life was suppressed for years. Time pass, things change, things are forgotten…
Here we are now. My children’s children are now grandparents. The remnants of humanity, “learning” from the recent past, have begun to come together to create a world society. They have started relearning the lost expertise of the old world. Much of the ruins have begun crumbling and manuscript have long become dust. The Society has searched far and all-embracing for remnants of the old world and has found much… I myself found a manuscript. It was within a ruin that had begun crumbling with a cross higher than it. I realized that the Society would have it destroyed as it does with everything it finds. So I hide it. I have read this manuscript. It teaches many things. I edify to my children, and they to theirs. I do not know what the title of it is. The cover and some of the pages were burnt and missing but it speaks of a wondrous place call Eden…
Answers:
i love it. really describtive. great job on this. you should write more!!
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I remember that one day… The day the world turned inward… The day the stars fell to the ground. The top soil became scorched. People turned to ash in mere second. Civilization crumbled in mere minutes. The world died in hours. Oceans boiled for days, months. Life was suppressed for years. Time pass, things change, things are forgotten…
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i love it. really describtive. great job on this. you should write more!!
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