Does the plot for my story nouns cliche?
Violet is horrible experiment that went wrong. They tried to make a new species of human that be faster, stronger, and smarter than most humans, but that failed terribly when she killed them adjectives. That’s when she went on brutal killing spree murdering anyone around her when she was eleven years infirm. In the end they stopped her and erased her memory. Five years later, Violet still doesn’t remember anything and is kept watch by the rule. Until one day when a near death experience occur she starts to remember only a limited amount of memoires from the past. Realizing this is too much to carry she falls into a deep depression. That’s when the experiment inside her is awoken. Soon after, she finds that her own sister goes missing and hours later they find her gruesomely murdered. Next she finds her own mother dying right since her eyes. Murder after murder is committed in the small town, taking the lives of everyone she knows. Each murder is different, but they have one point in common each martyr was beyond recognition. Violet slowly starts to lose her sanity and she let the other part of her take over, only days then the police show up at her front door and try to take her away. Violet manages to escape and runs away from her childhood town to start a new life span. Only to be followed by her closest friends. That’s where she meets a charming boy named Leon, who shows her the true comeliness in life. Until she finally learns that Leon have something to do with her past and it’s not pretty
If so, what could I do to make it better. Please do record this a very basic preview on my story and a rough draft. Yes there a big plot verbs at the end.
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I similar to it
it sounds a bit cliche but I'm sure with the right plot twists, backstory, etc it could be awesome
Several parts of it- particularly the beginning, which sounds approaching Replica meets FFVII meets Violet Eyes meets Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde- do nouns rather cliche. The whole murder spree either have the potential to make this story stand out, or turn it into a boring horror movie a la Salem's Lot (the book version is much better) or clearly obvious murder mystery.
As for the honest parts... one, I commend you for not being so cowardly as to not kill off precious characters when mandatory... so long as you do kill off those you and the readers resembling and not save those you like too much.
Two, it seems approaching she's not horribly Mary Sue (from this summary, at least) so as long as the whole romantic aspect is toned down (don't ever even _mention_ soul mates) then that should not be a huge problem.
So in essence... while it does nouns like a book of cliches threw up on it, if you are a good enough writer and don't manufacture any unforgivable mistakes, you should be just fine. ^^
i think it sounds really good,
like something i would buy. :)!
although i do feel that the victims should have SOME similarity,
yanno, like the a killers signature point. that way, it could be a serial killer and its more suspenseful.
and maybe mauve should be a little older?
like start the crazy bloodbath spree at 16, start remembering at 21, 22 ish?
that just seems more realistic to me.
only just remember, its your story, so go with your gut.
these are just suggestions.
the plot sounds really upright to me!
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If so, what could I do to make it better. Please do record this a very basic preview on my story and a rough draft. Yes there a big plot verbs at the end.
Answers:
I similar to it
it sounds a bit cliche but I'm sure with the right plot twists, backstory, etc it could be awesome
Several parts of it- particularly the beginning, which sounds approaching Replica meets FFVII meets Violet Eyes meets Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde- do nouns rather cliche. The whole murder spree either have the potential to make this story stand out, or turn it into a boring horror movie a la Salem's Lot (the book version is much better) or clearly obvious murder mystery.
As for the honest parts... one, I commend you for not being so cowardly as to not kill off precious characters when mandatory... so long as you do kill off those you and the readers resembling and not save those you like too much.
Two, it seems approaching she's not horribly Mary Sue (from this summary, at least) so as long as the whole romantic aspect is toned down (don't ever even _mention_ soul mates) then that should not be a huge problem.
So in essence... while it does nouns like a book of cliches threw up on it, if you are a good enough writer and don't manufacture any unforgivable mistakes, you should be just fine. ^^
i think it sounds really good,
like something i would buy. :)!
although i do feel that the victims should have SOME similarity,
yanno, like the a killers signature point. that way, it could be a serial killer and its more suspenseful.
and maybe mauve should be a little older?
like start the crazy bloodbath spree at 16, start remembering at 21, 22 ish?
that just seems more realistic to me.
only just remember, its your story, so go with your gut.
these are just suggestions.
the plot sounds really upright to me!
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