**am i a devout writer for lone 14 years feeble?? short please HELP?!?
**ANY OPINIONS?** (look at my other one too)
In a world so fast, so full of demands
I pause at the thought: its all contained by my hands
As for me:
All sit’s still, I cant help but wonder why?
This world is so complicated and full of lies
This world is a picture, thats what I say
Its time that I start fine art for a lifelong display
Why live in for tomorrow?
For it may never come
Its about time this world gets something done
As for demise:
All sits still, I cant help but wonder why?
This half spoken hello is your next goodbye
Nothing last, that’s what they all say
In a shorts time notice capably be digging your grave
The dirt piles in and the rest is history
You might as well run away, remain a mystery
As for love:
All sits still, I cant help but wonder why?
If you love her next why would you make her cry
Love is the fruit of life, that’s what they all read out
why would you begin if you knew you couldn’t stay
‘I love you’ is a powerful phrase
Not meant to be judge or forgotten the next day
Love is patient love is description
Genuine love is never easy to find
As for time:
All sits still, I cant help but wonder why?
The clock on the wall sings duet with mankind
Time ticks away and tell us what were left with
Make the most of it presently, for each second is a gift
The stopwatch of life have no pity on you
When the seconds run out, you’re done; no room to argue
Time is the key, that’s what they all enunciate
Without goals and effort, youre no more than a potters’ scrap clay
its in the order of time you learn to let go of yesteryear
after all this next breath? … could be your last
Answers:
I think it's amazing! I'm fourteen myself and never in a million years could I create something this economically written. Great job!
erm, bit overly-sentimental and trying to be overly-emotional and overly-complex. there are be of utting across string emoticons and complex feelings in a poem without stating it so effortlessly.
im not saying this is bad, but its not that great, and its not my thing intuitively.
You Are An Amazing Author, I Think This Is Some Great Stuff!
*tear*
Absolutely gorgeous
I bow to you in defeat (...not that I've done anything to counter)
Just that...it's really good and - if you really are fourteen - you are a devout writer! YAY! *grin*
i love it :)
very moving
its great
you should definitely go and get involved in some writing contests
Wow! thats is a beautiful poem! for a 14 year old that is really accurate. Im 13 myself. Love the last line!
Your are so amazing!!
Good...I resembling the message. Would you answer mine, i am 13 and would like your opinion.
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?…
its okay for someone else but I did not find it interesting
I think that that's really good! You should post this on mibba.com. it's really organized on there, and the folks there give you good criticism. Source(s): mibba.com
Oh my Gosh! You poems are absalutly amazing. I think you should transformation you're question to. 'How good are my poems? Awesome? I know!' They are like the best ones I've ever hear! And I'm like dead serious!! I did a poetry project last year.. I quality bad for my poems!! They were horrible!! Your words flow smoothly, and they all rhyme. YOu are completly awesome. Never contribute up, and to all those people who are like. please swot up to write poems (If you get any) They are DEFENITLY just jelious!! Ok well I hope you travel far with your poetry.
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What do you recomend? I like romantic comedy type books but I also like some mystery.I have enjoy the luxe series b Anna godberson and the private series by Kate Brian.I really liked the truth about forever by Sarah Dessen and Sweet 16(which was slot deeper than it sounds) by Kate Brian. Suggestions? Please and...
In a world so fast, so full of demands
I pause at the thought: its all contained by my hands
As for me:
All sit’s still, I cant help but wonder why?
This world is so complicated and full of lies
This world is a picture, thats what I say
Its time that I start fine art for a lifelong display
Why live in for tomorrow?
For it may never come
Its about time this world gets something done
As for demise:
All sits still, I cant help but wonder why?
This half spoken hello is your next goodbye
Nothing last, that’s what they all say
In a shorts time notice capably be digging your grave
The dirt piles in and the rest is history
You might as well run away, remain a mystery
As for love:
All sits still, I cant help but wonder why?
If you love her next why would you make her cry
Love is the fruit of life, that’s what they all read out
why would you begin if you knew you couldn’t stay
‘I love you’ is a powerful phrase
Not meant to be judge or forgotten the next day
Love is patient love is description
Genuine love is never easy to find
As for time:
All sits still, I cant help but wonder why?
The clock on the wall sings duet with mankind
Time ticks away and tell us what were left with
Make the most of it presently, for each second is a gift
The stopwatch of life have no pity on you
When the seconds run out, you’re done; no room to argue
Time is the key, that’s what they all enunciate
Without goals and effort, youre no more than a potters’ scrap clay
its in the order of time you learn to let go of yesteryear
after all this next breath? … could be your last
Answers:
I think it's amazing! I'm fourteen myself and never in a million years could I create something this economically written. Great job!
erm, bit overly-sentimental and trying to be overly-emotional and overly-complex. there are be of utting across string emoticons and complex feelings in a poem without stating it so effortlessly.
im not saying this is bad, but its not that great, and its not my thing intuitively.
You Are An Amazing Author, I Think This Is Some Great Stuff!
*tear*
Absolutely gorgeous
I bow to you in defeat (...not that I've done anything to counter)
Just that...it's really good and - if you really are fourteen - you are a devout writer! YAY! *grin*
i love it :)
very moving
its great
you should definitely go and get involved in some writing contests
Wow! thats is a beautiful poem! for a 14 year old that is really accurate. Im 13 myself. Love the last line!
Your are so amazing!!
Good...I resembling the message. Would you answer mine, i am 13 and would like your opinion.
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?…
its okay for someone else but I did not find it interesting
I think that that's really good! You should post this on mibba.com. it's really organized on there, and the folks there give you good criticism. Source(s): mibba.com
Oh my Gosh! You poems are absalutly amazing. I think you should transformation you're question to. 'How good are my poems? Awesome? I know!' They are like the best ones I've ever hear! And I'm like dead serious!! I did a poetry project last year.. I quality bad for my poems!! They were horrible!! Your words flow smoothly, and they all rhyme. YOu are completly awesome. Never contribute up, and to all those people who are like. please swot up to write poems (If you get any) They are DEFENITLY just jelious!! Ok well I hope you travel far with your poetry.
Related Questions:
Good teen/young fully fledged books?
What do you recomend? I like romantic comedy type books but I also like some mystery.I have enjoy the luxe series b Anna godberson and the private series by Kate Brian.I really liked the truth about forever by Sarah Dessen and Sweet 16(which was slot deeper than it sounds) by Kate Brian. Suggestions? Please and...