Please read first paragraph of story?
Going through these old photographs, I stop and pause. There’s one of me at age two, snuggled up on the couch next to Mommy, protected and warm in her loving embrace. Then there’s one of me learning to ride a bike at age four, Mommy holding onto the handlebars as I grin from ear to ear, have just ridden up and down the street without falling. I consider myself lucky, because I have these pictures. You don’t. And that’s why I entail to write it all down for you, so you remember. Because when you’re thirty, you’re not going to remember life before the Jensens, when we spent six years cart around like belongings at the mercy of people who did not have our best interests at heart. So when you read this, you’ll be elder, and you’ll have hopefully have had the wonderful childhood I option for you now. And maybe you’ll understand why. Maybe you can help out me, because I still don’t know.
I'm a 14 yr old hoping to be a published writer someday. Is this good and how can I improve it?
Answers:
Its pious already, but if you wanna make it better, add some hot smoking lesbians, with double-d's. And construct them shoot machine guns, and kill zombies! That would be a cool book.
yeah, its sounds like you have a good start.
this is silly, but i antipathy it when people say 'mommy' in near books. haha, sorry, it just bothers me.
good luck though. it sounds really good =]
Sounds great! I want to know what this is roughly speaking! It leaves me wanting to continue reading, which is the sign of a good catchy, introduction. Way to go, kiddo, maintain writing! :)
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What do u think 'bout it ? What do u know 'bout it ? | I read it. I didn't like it, quite frankly. I fond it difficult to return with past a few pages. :) That's my opinion, I hope I didn't put you rotten reading it!
I'm a 14 yr old hoping to be a published writer someday. Is this good and how can I improve it?
Answers:
Its pious already, but if you wanna make it better, add some hot smoking lesbians, with double-d's. And construct them shoot machine guns, and kill zombies! That would be a cool book.
yeah, its sounds like you have a good start.
this is silly, but i antipathy it when people say 'mommy' in near books. haha, sorry, it just bothers me.
good luck though. it sounds really good =]
Sounds great! I want to know what this is roughly speaking! It leaves me wanting to continue reading, which is the sign of a good catchy, introduction. Way to go, kiddo, maintain writing! :)
Related Questions:
Ever read the book The Game (by Neil Strauss) ?!?
What do u think 'bout it ? What do u know 'bout it ? | I read it. I didn't like it, quite frankly. I fond it difficult to return with past a few pages. :) That's my opinion, I hope I didn't put you rotten reading it!