Is this a biddable model for a story?
A girl in a small town goes missing. About a month later three kids(her brother,boyfriend, and best friend)get a entry in her handwriting. It tells them to go to the coffee house, sit within their booth, and look under the booth seat(or something like that). They all see respectively other and find the next note. As they read the next one it tell them to go somewhere else. In the notes the missing girl writes, she's telling frail memories as they go on and she is bringing her closer and closer to where she is. She's also giving hints on who the kidnapper is. In the end i cogitate they are going to find her in a cave dead next to the last note saying "you found me." it looks approaching she has been dead for awhile but someone have to write the notes they got. After thinking it through they think her spirit wrote the log and placed them, so something like that. i don't know how the ending will happen.
But anyway what do you reason? Do you think its a good idea? and should i write it? if yes does anyone own an idea for a title? the missing girls name is going to be Ashely but they call her Ash, and i want her dub somewhere in the title besides just Ash. so yeah any ideas?
Answers:
Good story.
Ashley trail
I infer that is a good idea!
At first i be like that doesnt make sense, but the end comes together immensely cool!
I say write it!
And for titles--->
Hm, maybe like..
Ashes to ashes.
Body of ashes.
Follow the ashes.
Ashelys correspondence
Tracing Ashely
Hope you like one.
My singular suggestion without seeing the actual writing is that, if you go the ghost route, which I don't believe is totally out there, you have to really make the crossing meaningful, worthwhile, and with a point of its own. Because my initial thought is, "why wouldn't the ghost only send them straight to the body?" So, if it doesn't, you have to make sure the trip carries some powerful meaning and effect for the still living characters who undergo it. Otherwise the reader will newly ask why the ghost didn't cut out all the run around and lead them to the body before.
Oh, one more suggestion, if she's still alive with a kidnapper and hiding the notes herself, how? What gentle of kidnapper takes her to the local public coffeehouse to hang out?
That's not to say it is unworkable, of late that you will need to justify the situation to the reader and figure out the logistics for yourself.
I really like that. It is a really good idea. I ponder when you finish your story you should put it on here and see what people think.
i like it how their is always a subsequent note wherever the parents go, it seem a bit strange though, why would a girl do that, but i think that's what makes it such a good storyline. the climax well they find a note the place where they find her corps her lead is missing and her hands have been decapitated, they grieve, next they look at the note and follow to the place where the note tell them to go, when they get there they arrive at a canyon beside a wooden bridge going across the top they are on one of the cliff at one of the sides, when they get to the parents both hear mommy whispering from the distance, a crow flies by, they look in a cavern where the note tells them to walk, the parents have lanterns, it is pitch black, in the underground cave they find the girls head with a bracelet in the mouth proverb omen, they drop there lanterns in that is no light, the girls hands fall from above, a monster comes out of the pit and kicks the parents down the cliff and they die.
yes, i like the concept!
but i'm not too fond of the missing girls spirit writing notes
It sounds good, and I would read it. :) Here are some title ideas:
Ashes to Ashes, Dust to Dust (or only just "Ashes to Ashes")
Finding Ash (or Finding Ashley)
That's something I would read! But don't post it online once you're done writing it cause someone might steal it ;)
I agree with Rodus about posting it online. I resembling it.
I think it's a really good model! It will catch the reader's attention from the very first moment. And when I read the You found me part I get chills! It's kinda a scary story isn't it? If it's not i understand, because i get worried by almost anything. but i really liked the end!
The title could be Ashley's Letters? Missing Ashley? Searching for Ashley (wow, that sucked)?
I'm sure you'll made something up yourself. Good luck with your story! I hope I can read someday!
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But anyway what do you reason? Do you think its a good idea? and should i write it? if yes does anyone own an idea for a title? the missing girls name is going to be Ashely but they call her Ash, and i want her dub somewhere in the title besides just Ash. so yeah any ideas?
Answers:
Good story.
Ashley trail
I infer that is a good idea!
At first i be like that doesnt make sense, but the end comes together immensely cool!
I say write it!
And for titles--->
Hm, maybe like..
Ashes to ashes.
Body of ashes.
Follow the ashes.
Ashelys correspondence
Tracing Ashely
Hope you like one.
My singular suggestion without seeing the actual writing is that, if you go the ghost route, which I don't believe is totally out there, you have to really make the crossing meaningful, worthwhile, and with a point of its own. Because my initial thought is, "why wouldn't the ghost only send them straight to the body?" So, if it doesn't, you have to make sure the trip carries some powerful meaning and effect for the still living characters who undergo it. Otherwise the reader will newly ask why the ghost didn't cut out all the run around and lead them to the body before.
Oh, one more suggestion, if she's still alive with a kidnapper and hiding the notes herself, how? What gentle of kidnapper takes her to the local public coffeehouse to hang out?
That's not to say it is unworkable, of late that you will need to justify the situation to the reader and figure out the logistics for yourself.
I really like that. It is a really good idea. I ponder when you finish your story you should put it on here and see what people think.
i like it how their is always a subsequent note wherever the parents go, it seem a bit strange though, why would a girl do that, but i think that's what makes it such a good storyline. the climax well they find a note the place where they find her corps her lead is missing and her hands have been decapitated, they grieve, next they look at the note and follow to the place where the note tell them to go, when they get there they arrive at a canyon beside a wooden bridge going across the top they are on one of the cliff at one of the sides, when they get to the parents both hear mommy whispering from the distance, a crow flies by, they look in a cavern where the note tells them to walk, the parents have lanterns, it is pitch black, in the underground cave they find the girls head with a bracelet in the mouth proverb omen, they drop there lanterns in that is no light, the girls hands fall from above, a monster comes out of the pit and kicks the parents down the cliff and they die.
yes, i like the concept!
but i'm not too fond of the missing girls spirit writing notes
It sounds good, and I would read it. :) Here are some title ideas:
Ashes to Ashes, Dust to Dust (or only just "Ashes to Ashes")
Finding Ash (or Finding Ashley)
That's something I would read! But don't post it online once you're done writing it cause someone might steal it ;)
I agree with Rodus about posting it online. I resembling it.
I think it's a really good model! It will catch the reader's attention from the very first moment. And when I read the You found me part I get chills! It's kinda a scary story isn't it? If it's not i understand, because i get worried by almost anything. but i really liked the end!
The title could be Ashley's Letters? Missing Ashley? Searching for Ashley (wow, that sucked)?
I'm sure you'll made something up yourself. Good luck with your story! I hope I can read someday!
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;…
Could you answer in the region of my story please?
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