Is this a honourable begining to a book? PLEASE ANSWER?
Helloooo. My parents and my teachers along the years have alwayspulled me aside and urged me to become a writer. I never wanted to write, but ive be thinking ltely..is this a good beginning to a story or short book?
Katie felt her means of access along the walls of Wregley Manor. The hard, wooden wall's gave her splinters as she walked through the gloomy corridors. Grasping her candle close, Katie held it with care in dread of it blowing out.
From upstairs, her brother could be heard talking to an owl outside his window. Katie rolled her eyes as she crawled into her not easy lumpy bed, for her irksome little brother was always talking to it. "Shut up, other society do live here!" Katie yelled as she kicked her feet agaisnt the low ceiling. Dust flew, a couple spiders scattered and her brother, Burte, know it was time for him to say goodbye.
Just a thought. Been working on it for a while. what do u think?
Answers:
woww... its really good! just some puncuation errors- but i think its great
It's really good. only tip I would hand over you is to not begin your first sentence with Katie. It makes the sentence give the impression of being a little bland and you don't want bland associated with the beginning of a story. Even if the following is a bit captivating. Source(s): Pearsonal reading, Own writings
I surmise you should do something with your life that you're passionate going on for. Publishers are very selective, and it takes a certain type of creature to go through the system and actually get something published. People typically enjoy to work at it for years and years and years, and have to work other jobs while they write. If this isn't something you're passionate going on for, you may not want it as a career. Do something you really love. If you haven't found anything you love yet, don't worry. You will.
Your parents and teacher are there to encourage you and may not be giving you the whole truth. If you ask them if you are polite at math for instance, or if you should be a lawyer, for example, they'll probably say sure.
You seem approaching a fairly decent writer. It's hard to compare you to the average writer because you aren't an mature. Lets just say you write about average for a 12 year old-fashioned. But being an author has very little to do next to raw talent. Yes, you have to be able to transmit a story, and tell it well, but it has greatly more to do with hard work, and wanting it badly ample.
I hope I helped. Best of luck :)
Not bad first try. "wall's" should be "walls".
The voice of Katie doesn't feel right against the voice of the third person storyteller.
Wow! It's really good in my belief! Your parents are right, you do write pretty well. You should really consider being a writer for living. I would love to keep reading this story!:D
How outmoded are you?
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it's a great introductory so far, but try and be better at ur punctuallity i my self am planning to be an author :)
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Katie felt her means of access along the walls of Wregley Manor. The hard, wooden wall's gave her splinters as she walked through the gloomy corridors. Grasping her candle close, Katie held it with care in dread of it blowing out.
From upstairs, her brother could be heard talking to an owl outside his window. Katie rolled her eyes as she crawled into her not easy lumpy bed, for her irksome little brother was always talking to it. "Shut up, other society do live here!" Katie yelled as she kicked her feet agaisnt the low ceiling. Dust flew, a couple spiders scattered and her brother, Burte, know it was time for him to say goodbye.
Just a thought. Been working on it for a while. what do u think?
Answers:
woww... its really good! just some puncuation errors- but i think its great
It's really good. only tip I would hand over you is to not begin your first sentence with Katie. It makes the sentence give the impression of being a little bland and you don't want bland associated with the beginning of a story. Even if the following is a bit captivating. Source(s): Pearsonal reading, Own writings
I surmise you should do something with your life that you're passionate going on for. Publishers are very selective, and it takes a certain type of creature to go through the system and actually get something published. People typically enjoy to work at it for years and years and years, and have to work other jobs while they write. If this isn't something you're passionate going on for, you may not want it as a career. Do something you really love. If you haven't found anything you love yet, don't worry. You will.
Your parents and teacher are there to encourage you and may not be giving you the whole truth. If you ask them if you are polite at math for instance, or if you should be a lawyer, for example, they'll probably say sure.
You seem approaching a fairly decent writer. It's hard to compare you to the average writer because you aren't an mature. Lets just say you write about average for a 12 year old-fashioned. But being an author has very little to do next to raw talent. Yes, you have to be able to transmit a story, and tell it well, but it has greatly more to do with hard work, and wanting it badly ample.
I hope I helped. Best of luck :)
Not bad first try. "wall's" should be "walls".
The voice of Katie doesn't feel right against the voice of the third person storyteller.
Wow! It's really good in my belief! Your parents are right, you do write pretty well. You should really consider being a writer for living. I would love to keep reading this story!:D
How outmoded are you?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;…
Answer mine please? Thanks!
it's a great introductory so far, but try and be better at ur punctuallity i my self am planning to be an author :)
Related Questions:
What did you surmise of this story excerpt that I wrote?
Sorry for the punctuation and grammatical errors. The sound of a rooster crowing was the first thing that stirred her from her slumber; that and an angry see to her ribs. She rose with a jolt, sitting up abruptly to facade her assaulter, only to find herself staring down...