I stipulation to fix a setence.. Anyone near gud writing skills serve!?
I wrote a sentence; The past lurks under the smile of Flora just waiting to burst through closed jaws. My teacher thinks i needto put a sentecne or two in between Flora and justl. so please aid.
(the woman i am talking about has developed an overly cheerly disposition to cope near a tajadey including the lose of the mentally disabled daughter rosalie)
Answers:
you get jokes.
The past is always nearby, just waiting to burst out through her tight-lipped smile.
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She smiled, but the grin didn't reach her eyes. The past lurked around the corners of her mouth, merely waiting to burst through her closed lips. It could not stay hidden forever.
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Around the edges of her tight-lipped smile, cracks were emergence to appear. The truth was ready to come bursting through, whether she wanted it to or not. It would not stay invisible forever.
I hope one of these helped. Source(s): Spare time writer... and I read a lot.
The past lurks below the Flora’s smile - just waiting to burst through closed lips.
Wow. I don't even know where to begin.
Well, in reality, yes I do....please purchase a dictionary, and learn to use it before writing another word.
Just...wow...
How about something like:
The past lurks, waiting, beneath the smile of Flora (or Flora's smile).
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Then something something like why or triggers or what is currently happening
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Pacing, caged like a beast, waiting to burst (out) (or, break free past) through closed maw.
Your sentence has a nice lyrical quality so if you wanted to save that I don't think saying more will hurt it as long as you are careful near your timing and vocabulary.
In the end it is your work and regardless of your teacher's notes you have to be likely to stand behind it.
Whilst teeth hidden clenched without blemish may give in at moments notice.
Sorry, I tried.
Your sentence seems fine to me.
However:
The olden lurks under Flora's smile. She has avoided those things for so long, but even at her happiest she senses the memories bubbling below. A cry of pain wait to burst through the closed lips of her smile.
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Can someone provide me a detailed summary of Eclipse [3rd book surrounded by Twilight series]?
That would be too damn long! Twilight Lexicon gives a detailed summary chapter by chapter. Hell you might as well just read the book! Source(s): http://twilightlexicon.com/?p=436 okay so edward and bella graduate and they have another birthday party for bella...
(the woman i am talking about has developed an overly cheerly disposition to cope near a tajadey including the lose of the mentally disabled daughter rosalie)
Answers:
you get jokes.
The past is always nearby, just waiting to burst out through her tight-lipped smile.
-
She smiled, but the grin didn't reach her eyes. The past lurked around the corners of her mouth, merely waiting to burst through her closed lips. It could not stay hidden forever.
-
Around the edges of her tight-lipped smile, cracks were emergence to appear. The truth was ready to come bursting through, whether she wanted it to or not. It would not stay invisible forever.
I hope one of these helped. Source(s): Spare time writer... and I read a lot.
The past lurks below the Flora’s smile - just waiting to burst through closed lips.
Wow. I don't even know where to begin.
Well, in reality, yes I do....please purchase a dictionary, and learn to use it before writing another word.
Just...wow...
How about something like:
The past lurks, waiting, beneath the smile of Flora (or Flora's smile).
--
Then something something like why or triggers or what is currently happening
--
Pacing, caged like a beast, waiting to burst (out) (or, break free past) through closed maw.
Your sentence has a nice lyrical quality so if you wanted to save that I don't think saying more will hurt it as long as you are careful near your timing and vocabulary.
In the end it is your work and regardless of your teacher's notes you have to be likely to stand behind it.
Whilst teeth hidden clenched without blemish may give in at moments notice.
Sorry, I tried.
Your sentence seems fine to me.
However:
The olden lurks under Flora's smile. She has avoided those things for so long, but even at her happiest she senses the memories bubbling below. A cry of pain wait to burst through the closed lips of her smile.
Related Questions:
Can someone provide me a detailed summary of Eclipse [3rd book surrounded by Twilight series]?
That would be too damn long! Twilight Lexicon gives a detailed summary chapter by chapter. Hell you might as well just read the book! Source(s): http://twilightlexicon.com/?p=436 okay so edward and bella graduate and they have another birthday party for bella...