What do you regard as?
what do you think about my harry potter fanfiction...
is it good??
be honest, constuctive criticism is welcome =)
this is called working for perfection:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5190051/1/Wo…
and this is the sequel, searching for perfection:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5425976/1/Se…
WARNING: contains eating disorders!
Answers:
Nice point of viewpoint...
Needs a little bit more elaboration (bombastic words, quotes, magic stuff) for perfection... but nicely done...
I did recognise that dialogue... although I consider the setting when the dialogue appeared is a little different... it would have been nicer if... the setting matched...
Good Work...
Cheers!!
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I'm 17. what do you consider of my writing?
Elma¡¯s shadow drifted down Redville¡¯s dark streets. She raised her eyebrows and twisted the sides of her lips downwards whenever the model of Vladimir, pulling out his dagger and dipping it in his chest, ran into her head. Even the carving of Edward¡¯s Gustav son as he cried over a faceless body, made her...
is it good??
be honest, constuctive criticism is welcome =)
this is called working for perfection:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5190051/1/Wo…
and this is the sequel, searching for perfection:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5425976/1/Se…
WARNING: contains eating disorders!
Answers:
Nice point of viewpoint...
Needs a little bit more elaboration (bombastic words, quotes, magic stuff) for perfection... but nicely done...
I did recognise that dialogue... although I consider the setting when the dialogue appeared is a little different... it would have been nicer if... the setting matched...
Good Work...
Cheers!!
Related Questions:
Harry's elder wand (death stick) vs. my disco stick, which would win?
Your one because its a real and physical. Harry's elder wand. What is magical about your disco stick?? Does it win every battle? Sorry but I will vote for harry. You will definitely win against Voldemort. Yours probably...just give Harry a good blow resting on his head with your...
I'm 17. what do you consider of my writing?
Elma¡¯s shadow drifted down Redville¡¯s dark streets. She raised her eyebrows and twisted the sides of her lips downwards whenever the model of Vladimir, pulling out his dagger and dipping it in his chest, ran into her head. Even the carving of Edward¡¯s Gustav son as he cried over a faceless body, made her...