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Preface
There was nothing at first. Then there be heavy breathing. Then the sound of a glass smashing. My mother shrieking. I feel tears running down my face. Danni, my friend I was with looked at me beside a questioned look in her eyes. I breathed hard. I realize that I was only a few streets away from my mother’s house. I quickly hung up my cell phone and bolted down the street, running as swift as I could.
I stopped to catch my breath and looked around. I was now solely one street away from my mother’s house. I breathed hard. Again I bolted down the street. I didn’t stop until I was at my mother’s house. Again I breathed hard. I looked up at my mother’s house, it be dark there was no flimsy inside, or at least that I could see. Running up to the front door I was worried. What was I going to find inside? I didn’t know.
I smashed the front door initiate and squinted my eyes, trying to see something. It was too dark to see anything. As I walked into the household room I could smell something. I didn’t know what it was at the time though I should of. I forced myself not to think what it was even though inside I know that I knew what it was. The family room glass was open. The light from the full moon be shining in. That’s where I saw her, near the pane. I could see her clearing with the moons light. I tried to look away but I couldn’t. I cried but tried to force away the tears. She had a bit put pen to paper on the left side of her neck. There was dry blood in attendance and blood down her neck and onto her breast area. I was crying too much so I run, ran far away from the horrible scene.
P.S. Its called Immortal.
Thanks in finance! :]
Answers:
Oooh!
This captured me reading the first sentance :]
I think it's great!
I like how you drew out the explanation of what she saw.
Very fitting! I think this is excellent, so is Forever Thirteen.
You are SO good at vampire books!
If you finish one of these books and publish it, I bet it would beat Twilight! :]
^o_o^
Robinstar <3
Good luck!
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There was nothing at first. Then there be heavy breathing. Then the sound of a glass smashing. My mother shrieking. I feel tears running down my face. Danni, my friend I was with looked at me beside a questioned look in her eyes. I breathed hard. I realize that I was only a few streets away from my mother’s house. I quickly hung up my cell phone and bolted down the street, running as swift as I could.
I stopped to catch my breath and looked around. I was now solely one street away from my mother’s house. I breathed hard. Again I bolted down the street. I didn’t stop until I was at my mother’s house. Again I breathed hard. I looked up at my mother’s house, it be dark there was no flimsy inside, or at least that I could see. Running up to the front door I was worried. What was I going to find inside? I didn’t know.
I smashed the front door initiate and squinted my eyes, trying to see something. It was too dark to see anything. As I walked into the household room I could smell something. I didn’t know what it was at the time though I should of. I forced myself not to think what it was even though inside I know that I knew what it was. The family room glass was open. The light from the full moon be shining in. That’s where I saw her, near the pane. I could see her clearing with the moons light. I tried to look away but I couldn’t. I cried but tried to force away the tears. She had a bit put pen to paper on the left side of her neck. There was dry blood in attendance and blood down her neck and onto her breast area. I was crying too much so I run, ran far away from the horrible scene.
P.S. Its called Immortal.
Thanks in finance! :]
Answers:
Oooh!
This captured me reading the first sentance :]
I think it's great!
I like how you drew out the explanation of what she saw.
Very fitting! I think this is excellent, so is Forever Thirteen.
You are SO good at vampire books!
If you finish one of these books and publish it, I bet it would beat Twilight! :]
^o_o^
Robinstar <3
Good luck!
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What identify do you approaching.?
What name do you like.?I am writing a story and i can not choose between two names. Blaze and Justin. Here's a description of him, he have beautiful gleaming crimson eyes, tall and a slim muscular body. In the book he falls for the main part and he also wields the element of fire. What name do you...
Hunger Games =]]]]]]]?
amazing book! i finished the first one a couple days ago and im gunna start the second one as soon as i get the book =] i cant wait!! did you like the book? i sure did! I love the Hunger Games and Catching Fire, I can not linger for book 3 and the movie. :DCheck out this fan site...