Does my story seem to be interesting to you?
Please be honest but don't be too mean because I am 14 and just a beginner.
SHORT SUMMARY OF MY STORY:
So Emma (17) who is the fundamental character of the story moves in with her cousins to return with out of the contry life and live a city life to see how it is like since she wishes to live in a city. One day, her cousin Mark introduces his best friend Bryan to Emma and they begin floppy out all summer until one day, when Emma and Bryan gets separated from Mark within the city, Emma and Bryan miss they last subway back to Mark`s apartment. They don`t know what to do and it was already behind time out so they decided to stay a night at the nearest Hotel. Emma and Bryan starts developing a strong relationship until December when Emma has to bring back back to her hometown. Later on, Emma finds out she is pregnant and her parents force her to get an abortion but Emma refuses and present birth to her baby in her room. 8 yrs later the couple reunite and ya, relaxed :)
so yeah that's a short summary for my story and I was wondering if it is a interesting plot.
If you think it is boring, please explain why and tell me what i can do to spice it up a bit. I know in attendance are alot of love stories out there but this is the first novel I created so yeah...
P.S. Don`t comment on my grammar and spelling because I am just a beginner and I admit my grammar and spelling is not the best.
Answers:
yeah it would be interesting, possibly if she ran away from home to have the child, but when the father of the baby finds out, within should be a conflict, as he was not told i assume, then maybe you could work out some sunny ending.
i think a few more characters should be developed, like a best from from rear legs home, maybe a supporting aunt that lives in another city.
hope that helps, but it sounds pretty righteous as it is.
i dream up a lot more could happen, but yeah, it's pretty good
I construe its okay! The Problem is I don't like stories that happen. (And Eight years later.) That is soo dull, but I reckon you should have her tell him, but he cant except it, and she is all by herself, beside her unborn child. About a year or two later, he tries to find her, realizing that he felt the woman he is soo within Love with. Will she take him back or won't she?
See to be precise so much more interesting then. (AND EIGHT YEARS LATER.) you know? lol
Hope I helped. (Nothing was intended to be mean, Im a reader/writer, just like yourself. I believe your story sounds wonderful. Besides the whole eight years later, do you know how long that is lol.)
Chickie
Well... It seems kind of... I don't know... Unoriginal? Two teens lose their guide, end up staying together contained by a hotel, fall in love, leave respectively other, confront their parents, have a baby, and all's well that ends capably? That's a little redundant, don't you think? By the way, don't deliberate I'm being harsh, because I'm younger than you by a year... You should just furnish it a little extra something... Something that makes it different than other love stories... Maybe it's the charcters' backgrounds (where they come from, who they are, and all that jazz), maybe it's the setting. Just try things and see where they step. If you really want to write a story, you have to be willing to make change.
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Don't you have a sneaking suspicion that this sounds close to Twilight...?
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SHORT SUMMARY OF MY STORY:
So Emma (17) who is the fundamental character of the story moves in with her cousins to return with out of the contry life and live a city life to see how it is like since she wishes to live in a city. One day, her cousin Mark introduces his best friend Bryan to Emma and they begin floppy out all summer until one day, when Emma and Bryan gets separated from Mark within the city, Emma and Bryan miss they last subway back to Mark`s apartment. They don`t know what to do and it was already behind time out so they decided to stay a night at the nearest Hotel. Emma and Bryan starts developing a strong relationship until December when Emma has to bring back back to her hometown. Later on, Emma finds out she is pregnant and her parents force her to get an abortion but Emma refuses and present birth to her baby in her room. 8 yrs later the couple reunite and ya, relaxed :)
so yeah that's a short summary for my story and I was wondering if it is a interesting plot.
If you think it is boring, please explain why and tell me what i can do to spice it up a bit. I know in attendance are alot of love stories out there but this is the first novel I created so yeah...
P.S. Don`t comment on my grammar and spelling because I am just a beginner and I admit my grammar and spelling is not the best.
Answers:
yeah it would be interesting, possibly if she ran away from home to have the child, but when the father of the baby finds out, within should be a conflict, as he was not told i assume, then maybe you could work out some sunny ending.
i think a few more characters should be developed, like a best from from rear legs home, maybe a supporting aunt that lives in another city.
hope that helps, but it sounds pretty righteous as it is.
i dream up a lot more could happen, but yeah, it's pretty good
I construe its okay! The Problem is I don't like stories that happen. (And Eight years later.) That is soo dull, but I reckon you should have her tell him, but he cant except it, and she is all by herself, beside her unborn child. About a year or two later, he tries to find her, realizing that he felt the woman he is soo within Love with. Will she take him back or won't she?
See to be precise so much more interesting then. (AND EIGHT YEARS LATER.) you know? lol
Hope I helped. (Nothing was intended to be mean, Im a reader/writer, just like yourself. I believe your story sounds wonderful. Besides the whole eight years later, do you know how long that is lol.)
Chickie
Well... It seems kind of... I don't know... Unoriginal? Two teens lose their guide, end up staying together contained by a hotel, fall in love, leave respectively other, confront their parents, have a baby, and all's well that ends capably? That's a little redundant, don't you think? By the way, don't deliberate I'm being harsh, because I'm younger than you by a year... You should just furnish it a little extra something... Something that makes it different than other love stories... Maybe it's the charcters' backgrounds (where they come from, who they are, and all that jazz), maybe it's the setting. Just try things and see where they step. If you really want to write a story, you have to be willing to make change.
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Public libraries??
The first public library i went to is the memorial public library but i have a high fine i cant remuneration so i want to go to the betty warmack library or any other arlington library could i go or would i still have to discharge the fine ? Yes, you will still have to salary. They will track you down...
Don't you have a sneaking suspicion that this sounds close to Twilight...?
Brick by boring brick - paramoreSo one day he found her cryingCoiled up on the dirty groundHer prince finally came to save herAnd the rest you can integer outBut it was a trickAnd the clock struck 12Well make sure to build your house brick by boring brickor the wolves gonna blow...